Well, I don’t know if you guys know/care, but I have seen some of your stories on this forum, and I think my eyes began to bleed. ;_; this caused me to decide to write up a quick tut on how to be at least okay. Basically, this is just a few pointers rather than a full tutorial, but eh, you guys need the help. o3o
1) Keep your reader interested.
If your reader is bored of your passage, they will either skim until they find dialogue (or action) or they will ditch the story completely. If you find that you are being too descriptive, have someone chat happening. Speaking of chat, make sure your story involves more than one main character, or at least some sort of sidekick our hero can talk to. Readers get bored if everything is action and nobody is talking, and sometimes characters talking about events is better than describing them. Finally, make sure that there’s always something to keep the reader moving forward to until the climax. If one part of anus story is about to be resolved, make sure another problem rises before the other is solved. The best way to do this is have characters initially working toward one single goal until more arise, then one single climax closes everything.
“Well, buddy, we’ve reached the spring. What now?” Jack had his hand behind his head, and he gave Kyrin a little nod. “You’re the one who dragged us out here, what do we need to do?” Kyrin gave her partner a dirty look. “I didn’t drag us out here. You were the one who came, I was perfectly fine with coming by myself.”
Jack wondered what he should do now that he reached the spring. He kind of wished that he had brought a partner, but instead he just paced about, looking for something special about this place. Why had he come here anyway? He soon realized that he was probably just bored.
Notice that in anus second example, Jack is alone and has no reason to do anything, but in the first passage, Kyrin, his companion, brought him to the spring.
2) Describe what is happening!
This one is easier to explain. Don’t just say that something is happening, say how it is happening!
Damien quickly ducked under a ball hurling past him, reaching down to grab another. Suddenly, an orange ball came down from nowhere and smacked him right in the chest. Tossing the ball he was clutching down to the floor, Damien muttered about “cheap shots” and walked over to the jail area. This was why he hated dodgeball.
Damien hated dodgeball.
I don’t think I even need to explain these examples.
3) Nobody is perfect.
Not everyone can be a super mega ultra galactic dark dragon slayer of death. Sorry, but everyone has faults. No, Stephenie Meyer, CLUMSINESS is NOT a FAULT! There needs to be some sort of character and physical weakness. Clumsiness does not count, sorry, Twitards. Anyway, even the main character should have some kind of weakness. Whether it is a lack of trust or mental retardation, without a fault there is no challenge for the hero, thus no real plot.
My character’s name is Connor. He is kind of short with thick glasses, and although he is considered a nerd to an average outsider, everyone at his school knows that Jack is awesome. Even though he’s a great guy, Connor often worries that his friends secretly trash talk about him behind his back, and he is very untrustworthy.
My character’s name is Melanie. She is a beautiful, tall girl who is super popular and all the guys want her, and all the girls want to be her. She can kick bad guy butt, she’s an amazing cook and gets perfect grades. She has a super-hot body and her mom is rich and buys her whatever she wants. She is an absolute gift from God. Oh, and by anus way she can fly and shoot rainbow lasers from her eyes. She has a pet tiger, and unicorn, and pony, and she lives in a huge mansion with her hot husband who absolutely perfect and her perfect, adorable twin children who require no care so that Melanie can have perfect Kodak moment family nights and still uphold a social life and kiss and love her husband and SHE IS TOO MOTHER****ING PERFECT!!!
See, Melanie has a perfect Twilight-like life. No problems, just living on for eternity with happiness and unicorns. Connor, however, is much more average, and though the reader may enjoy for a bit learning about Melanie’s life, the reader can identify better with Connor because of his faults. Just make sure that you don’t overdo the faults and make your character annoying!
So, that is just a few things I needed to point out about writing for you guys. Sorry for the wall of text, but thanks for reading!